I just wanted some feedback for my first burning wheel character ever. My concept is that of an underground wizard where sorcery is banned under threat of death, there is a rumor of a rebellion brewing in a corrupt kingdom.
Aiden was born in the village of Luxford Crossing a small town near the capital city of Luminous. His mother died in labor and his father took to raising himself but as he realized his son had the gift he tried to hide him from the world but was still unable to prevent rumors from spreading about the magical nature of his child. An old man who frequented the town for supplies heard about the rumors and confronted the father about them, in the end Aiden was sent to be raised by the wizard where he taught him how to conceal his gifts and control them properly among tutoring about responsibility, and other education basics. The old man was half mad but the apprenticeship benefited him greatly, when he finished his apprenticeship he moved to the city of Luminous because he heard of their libraries as a wellspring of knowledge. He learned first hand just how bad the ban on sorcery was after moving to the city and he survived his fair share of witch hunts over his years of study, usually under the guise of a private tutor or alchemist. His customers dont know the potions are magical but he rellies on his disgression. Thanks to his old mentor he met with some underground sorcerers where they would pass along discoveries and arcane knowledge to each other in the hopes of one day returning magic to the land. He has recently fell on hard times and acquired financial patronage from an influential merchant family, they do not yet realize what they are really funding.
Concept/Bio: Underground Wizard, Adept (definition from MaBu being the wizard with a lot to learn)
Lifepaths: Gifted Child, Wizard’s Apprentice, Hedge Wizard
Age : 25
Stats: Wi: B5, Pe: B4, Po: B2, Fo: B4, Ag: B4, Sp: B4, Stride: 7
Attributes: Ref: B4, Ste: B6, Hes: 5, Hea: B4, MW: B9, Circles: B2, Resources: B1
PTGS: Su: B3 Li: B5 Mi: B6 Se: B7 Tr: B8 Mo: B9
I will return magic to the land, by joining the rebellion
The secrecy of other sorcerers is of utmost importance, never divulge information about other practitioners of the sorcerous arts under any circumstances
Do not tolerate the presence of fools
If I encounter anything I am unfamiliar with, Research it at the first opportunity
Always keep my spell tome concealed and secret.
Always keep inconspicuous in public and cautious in private
Traits: [Char] Always in the Way, [Dt] Gifted, [Dt] Low Born, [Dt] Misunderstood, [Char] Strong Willed
Skills: Alchemy B3, Circination B2, Enchanting B2, Foraging B2, Obscure History B3, Read B2, Sorcery B5, Summoning B2, Symbology B2, Write B2
Relationships: Mentor (Significant, immediate family, forbidden), Father (Minor, immediate family, hateful/rival)
Gear: Clothes & Shoes
Spells: Fire Fan , The Fear
does this accurately portray my concept? Anything i could have done better or suggestions to make this character more believable?